Opinion about short film and help on CG used

Question

Hello all!
Not sure this is the correct place to post this. If I'm in the wrong location, please place this post in the correct location.
Forgive my bad english, ok?
Guys, I know there are many artists here in this forum, so I would ask for help for artists.
I posted a short film yesterday and for lack of time and knowledge of CG, my short film was amateur, I know.
I would ask a help to the artists here and ask how I could improve the effects of this short film?
What would you do to improve, what features would you use the AE to enhance the film?
I filmed with a 5D mark 2 and mark 3.
I used the AE and Premier.
I'm sure your comments will help me produce something better next time.
It may be a tip, an article, plugins name, names of AE filters, finally, it will help the whole community, I'll put your name of credits as a thank you.
Thank you, I'm sure that everyone at least help with a tip, it will be of great value.
Short Film - http://www.epicfilmes.com/cinema/salmo-23-4

Answer 1

The only effect that I saw that looked a little cheesy was the glowing eyes at the end of the film. It was a little too intense and could have use a little more finesse and some better tracking.
The film in general suffers from pacing problems. This is the hardest thing for an editor to learn. It needs to be tightened up so you just show enough to tell the story. I worked on a feature once that spent 6 days on location filming with a crew of more than 50 and a cast of 10. When the final film was released there were only about 4 shots from 6 days of filming final cut because all of that other material didn't contribute to the telling of the final story.
Keep the effects subtle. Move the camera closer to your actors and use wider lenses. Don't move the camera unless the movement emphasizes a plot point. Keep up the good work.